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I am very excited for the Christmas holidays, I want to see my family, friends and my city. I miss my life a lot, I want to be on my way home. These 2 months will be eternal for me, this experience in Canada has been very difficult, new friends, new school, a new life, and different from what I used to. I have to get used to it, it will be something difficult but not impossible. It’s hard for me to be away from my family and live without them.It is not the first time that I am going away from home, I have already traveled to more distant places, but only on vacation with friends, the most I went was a month, and now it will be like 9 months of being out of my country with the people I love. I hope this experience serves me a lot in the future, and all thanks to my family.

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3 thoughts on “PW”

  1. Hi Ashley, I liked your topic very much because it is very relatable. My suggestion would be to use conjunctions more, so your sentences would link together fluidly. For example: “These 2 months will be eternal for me, (because) this experience in Canada has been very difficult…”
    When you have already used the same conjunction words twice but the sentence still continues, it might be a bit too long, so it is okay to separate it into two sentences instead of one. 😃

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  2. Hello Ashley, I like the way of how you have expressed your situation within life right now, but I came across a small error which you should correct so that you do not make the same mistake in later writings… You wrote: “It’s hard for me to be away from my family and live without them.It…” Here you should have added a space after your period like this: It’s hard for me to be away from my family and live without them. It…

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  3. Hey Ashely

    I totally get your point of view, I understand what you feel!

    I just want to point out the way your sentences are strutted, it’d be better instead of using lots of commas, making sentences shorter so its easier for the redder to understand what you are writing. Nice job though

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