independent reading, Ashley

that summer in Paris, Morley Callaghan

morley´s husband is talking about when he went to New York and what he was doing there, he learn things, he was taking lunch with a friend and talk about life.

on the way to Paris we stopped over in New York and had lunch with Perkins, and I had to smile to myself watching him draw out my wife, making sure she belonged, just as he had done with me. When he learned that she had gone to a convent he seemed pleased. with surprising firmness he said all girls ought to be educated in convents. what about his five daughters? I wondered. With his soft approach, sometimes appearing to be intellectually way out in left field, what a firm-minded man he was.

I chose this quote because I thing this part is interesting, shows what Hemingway is doing and what he thinks and how was the trip on New York city. he was listening to Perkins of what he thinks about a convent and more.

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4 thoughts on “independent reading, Ashley”

  1. Hi, Ashely
    My corrections for you would be capitalising the beginning of your sentences and proper nouns, along with grammar. In the first sentence, quite a few words where conjugated incorrectly, or word placements were off. For example, he was doing there, he learn things,
    should be he was doing there. He learned many things.

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    1. Great topic, but you need to make sure your sentences are properly structured, like Kaelin expressed in her note to you.

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      1. Another suggestion, is to proof read your entire article to avoid mistakes such as run on sentences. For example: “because I thing this part is interesting, shows what Hemingway is doing and what he thinks and how was the trip on New York city. he was listening to Perkins of what he thinks about a convent and more.”

        The grammar and capitalization needs work. But given that English is not your first language, great job!

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  2. This is an interesting passage and analysis. Something to do to improve would be to, instead of just writing “that summer in Paris, Morley Callaghan,” would be to incorporate it in your introduction. For instance, “In “That Summer in Paris” by Morley Callaghan, Morley’s husband is…”

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